Yang Hunts Anatomy ~ offical fanfic challenge Jun 14, 2011 5:55:14 GMT -5
Post by ruralstar on Jun 14, 2011 5:55:14 GMT -5
Only a few mentions I want to make, that don't have to do with the way the chapter was written, but about the characters.
Owen is a very private person, I could say the most private person in that hospital. So to simply blurt out to Callie that Cristina is pregnant seemed to me out of character. He may get along with Callie better that with the other doctors in that hospital, he may have shared the same apartment with her, but I simply don't see him just going and discussing such a private matter with her. It's the inner turmoil that makes Owen such an interesting character to me, Cristina is the one person he shares his feelings with. He completely trust her, he has shared with her his inner most fears, she has seen in him in most vulnerable state. No one else, but Cristina. I think this is one of the reasons he felt so hurt in the SF.
I just don't see him sharing with Callie such a delicate and personal matter (at least the Owen they showed till now on the show). I do see him going to his mother and talking to her about this. And I liked that scene you wrote a lot.
Also I think Owen seeing that mistreated child and thinking that Cristina might do the same was a bit out of place, since Cristina has already said that if she had the baby, she would love him/her. And even more because Owen already told Cristina the she would be a great mother.
I think that Cristina has yet to realize that it is a human being growing inside of her, not just a simple "it" and to realize that Owen indeed made sacrifices in this marriage. Mocking Owen and sarcasm doesn't help Cristina right now. But I am glad that she is willing to fight for her marriage. I hope the separation won't be for too long.
Again great job and I cannot wait for the next chapter.
Stepping in to say thank you for all of the positive comments. I'm glad you're enjoying this first section. To Trinity specifically:
You make a valid point about Owen. Which is why he doesn't tell Callie everything. Seeing the abused child, not having slept, and being so overwrought over his marriage were factors working against his inherent need for privacy. As for his thoughts regarding Cris and the baby... Well I think we're trying to explore everything that might pass through our characters minds. When push comes to shove I don't think Owen would actually believe Cris was capable of abuse. Would it occurr to him? Possibly. In the same way it occurrs to him later that maybe Cris doesn't really love him. The thoughts are devastating.
As for Cristina... Objectifying a child is a good coping mechanism. Not a very palatable one to us as readers/viewers but understandable given Cris' situation.
As writers we all make choices that will stretch the characterization envelop in different directions. I appreciate your comments and I hope we as a writing staff can effectively show growth for Cristina and Owen. Which is something that has been sorely lacking on GA.